This rejection came with some good comments, I think. I’ve got a better understanding of what the market wants. Here are the comments:
Unfortunately, it’s not quite right for us. The narrative was quite vivid, but it seemed to me more focused on description and less focused on Caerelyn’s character. I wanted to get just as vivid a feel for her core goal as a character, her deepest hopes and fears, as I was getting of the furnishings of the main hall of the King’s Castle. I wanted the narrative to go inside her head and give me a feel for what inner yearning was driving her through the story, and this opening didn’t provide that as much as I prefer.
That’s it. It’s off somewhere else!