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Stuff & Book Review: Old Man’s War by John Scalzi

First, some notes on relatively important dates: Sunday, 11th: Chapter Eleven goes up!Friday, 16th: New book review of Tower of Shadows.Sunday, 25th: Chapter Twelve goes up! Next, I wonder how many of you are note takers. There was a short bit in the comments in my last blog about Tolkien. I mentioned that when he died he left behind a garage full of notes that are still to this day being dealt with. The idea of that is staggering when you think about it.So, I’m curious to know how indepth you all are in your note taking. Personally I don’t take a lot of notes unless I’m dealing with a story that is hard scifi. For fantasy, it’s mostly just making it up as I go. Take for instance my recent efforts for a hard scifi story. I spent about 10 hours worth of research this weekend to make sure that I stayed roughly within the parameters of modern physics as we know it. I had to make sure that star systems I wanted to use for the story could do what I needed them to do, etc. So, a good ten hours later I had over forty systems categorized and labeled for who controlled them, how many habitable planets if any, and the like. But for the story that is on this blog, The World in the Satin Bag, mostly I had an idea and I ran with it. Take Chapter Ten. I had no idea I was going to have the tunnel end in darkness. Not a clue actually. Originally I had thought they would get across and maybe get ambushed and be on their merry way to Arnur. But now, turns out my mind wanted to do something completely different. And, well there you have it. Chapter Eleven should prove to be most interesting in regards to the pace of the story. In fact, I think Chapter Eleven deals with one of my inborn fears that keeps me out of certain places in the world.So, as it is, it’s time for a book review!Old Man’s War is a fantastic military SF novel. I was pleasantly surprised. My first reaction when I saw it was written in first person was that of disinterest. I have a huge problem getting into first person stories and rarely do such POV’s hold my attention. This is not the case with Old Man’s War (OLM from this point on).The story is set in the far future. Earth has become basically a backwater world as mankind has colonized other star systems under the military power of the Colonial Defense Forces, an entity that controls the bulk of human resources. Yet, the odd part is that rather than desiring to have young, fresh recruits join from Earth into the CDF, they are looking for the elderly. John Perry is one such person. His wife has died and he has opted to join. The downside: he can never return to Earth, interstellar war is hell, and he has to survive for two years minimum before he can retire to a generous homestead on one of the many colony worlds.The story itself starts out perfectly. I don’t want to ruin anything, but from the get go you have an amazing clarity of who the characters are. Each character is dynamic, despite having only existed on the page for a mere few chapters. The humor between the characters is superb and I found myself giggling with joy at the witty remarks some of the characters made.The pace is quick and sturdy, making all the twists and turns even more disturbing and surprising. I must say this is by far one of the best novels I have read in a long time. It held my attention from start to finish. The description of battle, characters, and the world Mr. Scalzi has created are amazingly portrayed. You get a great sense of what it must be like to be a soldier for the CDF. I would recommend this to anyone who enjoys SF, in any genre.

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Nifty Tools and Brainstorming

I decided that even though I have posted for this week, I would post again for the weekend because I’ve come up with some interesting information for those of you who are writers, and presumably this same information could come of use to perhaps businessmen and the like as well. At least I suppose so. First, I’d like to thank all of you who have commented and have said nice things about my writing. I greatly appreciate it and I hope that all of you will continue to read. I discovered this program called FreeMind from the blog of Jason Penney (Using a Mind Map to Organize Novel Notes). It essentially organizes notes for you into Mind Maps. What are Mind Maps? Well, remember when you were a kid and your teacher said, “Write one idea in a bubble and then start drawing lines to new ideas and thoughts, and then more thoughts and ideas on those”, so that you ended up with this paper of connected thoughts and information? That’s basically a Mind Map, albeit less complicated. Now, this isn’t to say that using FreeMind is complicated. Not at all. In fact, once you figure out the very basic commands it’s incredibly simple to use. Here’s an example of one I’m working on right now. Albeit, I have some things closed off (lines that end in little ‘o’ things are ones that can be further expanded for more info within the program), simply because they would make it too big to get an accurate image of.(Clicking the image should make it larger so you can see the words better)This makes organizing my thoughts so much easier. In fact, when I started doing it, I only have some minor ides of certain things. After a while I had huge lists of stuff on there because the Mind Mapping process allowed me to come up with more ideas. Now, this isn’t to say that I use this to come up with story ideas, but it is saying that I’m using this process to organize valuable information. In the case of the above image, I’ve had to keep note of different stars, their types, and various other information that would come in use during the story that I’m modeling on this subject. So, essentially, that’s Mind Mapping.Now, this is a whole new thing for me and I’m still not entirely sure how I will utilize it for all my writing efforts. In the instance of science fiction the program comes in great use because it allows me to keep track of various little minor facts that otherwise would get forgotten–physics, star system information, and the like. With fantasy, I imagine I could do much the same, but I have yet to start Mind Mapping all my info for The World in the Satin Bag yet. Perhaps it will happen. Alternately, I’m wondering what all of you do in your brainstorming sessions–you being the reader of course. Before this program, it was mostly coming up with a basic plot or event. In the case of The World in the Satin Bag, my first thought was of a boy who gets sucked into an alternate world. Originally I had no idea it would be at the state it is now. I had no idea that his friend would get sucked in first, nor that war would break out, or anything of that nature. I had expected that he would just gain magic from being there, and not because he had a Fearl–a concept I didn’t come up with until more or less by accident while writing the scene when Laura gets sucked in. So my brainstorming starts out to be very basic. I don’t flesh out entire ideas on purpose. For me, fleshing out ideas tends to leave me with little ‘freedom’. I know I can change anything at any time, but the problem is I’ve already come up with a story I like. I’d much rather leave the majority of the plot unwritten in my mind so that I can have free reign in the direction of the story. The furthest I think ahead is what the next chapter is ‘basically’ going to be about. This is all of course referring to fantasy.But for science fiction I have a lot more issues to deal with. I tend to have grand scale ideas of a aliens and Earth and humankind. So, my first thoughts are: How am I going to get Humans from here to there in reasonable time? How did they get there in the first place? Did someone help us? Are we alone in our fight for whatever might need fighting for?I try to answer those, because they serve as the backdrop of my science fiction world. So, I’m curious what those of you do to flesh out your ideas, or if you do that at all. Are you the type to simply sit back and go with the flow? Or do you like to work out the story ahead of time?

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Our World Changing–Writer’s Be Aware

Well, it looks like things are making some interesting changes that I was completely unaware of. 1) Firstly, apparently scientists have developed a way to levitate things via sound. You can find the link here at Tales From the Raven. They levitated an ant, a fish, and a tadpole. I’m rather disturbed by it because, well, that’s just creepy. Can you imagine walking around and suddenly get picked up? And who knows where this technology might go in the future. Perhaps we could use it for targeted attacks of some sort. Perhaps police officers will use it for something. Who knows. 2) Some things on writing of interest to anyone who writes. Over at Quantum Storytelling there is an interesting checklist of scene necessities, especially on the different conflicts necessary. I think it greatly applies to fantasy, but that’s my opinion.3) New Links: You’ll notice several new links over there ——–>Well, figured I’d explain what some of them are :). First there’s Blogels, a nifty site that links to a bunch of other blog novels such as mine–although not in the same genres. They deserve as much attention as mine I gather. There’s Blogging Poet, a lovely place with poetry, interesting news about poetry and things going on in the world, and it apparently has a poetry search engine that I have yet to use as of yet. Sword & Sorcery/Weird Fiction Terminus is a nice blog that has book reviews and the like–mostly related to fantasy of course. SF Bookworm is a bit misleading at first as the title suggests it is related only to SF, when in fact it is just a big blog about all sorts of speculative fiction writing. This post was about who won the grand master award at the latest World Horror Convention. Of Making Many Books is yet another writing advice blog and recently had some great info on “Show, Don’t Tell”. An Urban Fantasy is a blog by debut author Alan Campbell which is more or less related to writing, whether directly or not, and is rather entertaining to read. From the Cradle to the Slave is a fantastic beginning to a potentially thrilling scifi novel. Hopefully the author will get some more chapters up soon as I have quite enjoyed reading it. Pocket Full of Words is a lovely blog by a fellow writer of what looks to be fantasy. She’s got three novels in progress, so best of luck to finishing all of them. After all, I’m doing one…Heather Harper I managed to find by accident. She’s also writing a YA fantasy and I look forward to reading more on her blog as she progresses in this endeavor. Lowe Brow is doing the same as the previously mentioned site, posted in installments and also podcasted. All the Billion Other Moments is another writers blog with some helpful insights into the writing life, progress, and the like. Scribblings of a Madman is a journal by a fellow amateur novelist about his writing life. Write, Pam, Write! is a blog by a three time NaNoWriMo winner. She’s currently working on a novel called Eagle’s Heart. And finally there is S. William Shaw, Writer!–a blog about the progress of his novel endeavors in the younger adult field than my own, but still worth a lovely read. So, this is my midweek post for no real reason other than the fact that I am home and available to do it. Don’t expect midweek posts often, but yeah, here it is.

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Chapter Ten: Turned Black the Old Oak and Farewell

(Note:  This is not official version and may be removed in the near future.  This do not reflect what is read in the podcast version, nor any other version you may encounter.  I have preserved the rough form for posterity — or something like that.  This novel has since been rewritten.) Nub had tried hard to keep James in the room. She pleaded and begged, half dropping to her knee for him to stay. But he couldn’t. He had to know what the sounds were—the horns. He left the room; Nub refused to follow and curled in a ball near the door. Here and there he stumbled from weakness, succumbing to the effects of his wounds. It was all he could do to stay full upright, let alone see all that stood before. Each step, however, grew easier, and he felt his strength returning in groves. Yet, he paused outside the door, using the corner of a nearby wall as a support and nearly fainted. Rays of light ran along his exposed skin and lit up the face of the wall so he could see the paleness of the stone. Dawn, inescapable and unforgettably true, came at him as if a call from the Heaven that only he believed existed. He faced the mountains beyond and became overwhelmed by the greatness of the sun as it passed between two peaks, lighting everything in its path. For the first time, looking east, he saw the wide expanse of farmland that extended down the backside of Arlin City and on past the walls and into the country beyond, meeting up with the Far’anon River. Part of the river had been diverted into a series of canals and irrigation ditches like a giant maze of sparkling pathways. The farmland ended in a series of thickets, each round and independent of one another. They dotted the landscape like a group of toadstools. And then, like a massive blow to his gut, the reality of the situation presented itself. The euphoric moment ended and he realized that the sun was rising from the wrong side—the west. Panic struck through the inhabitants of Arlin City. He had been too blind to it to realize. People of all shapes and sizes ran frantically to nowhere at all. Below he could see nothing but chaos as men, women, and children of all races crowded around the western wall as far away from the main gates as possible. It was as if they hoped they could escape magically through the stone, but he could sense that the majority of them couldn’t use magic at all. Soldiers appeared from various sections of the city below, forming ranks and marching to the western wall, and though from this position he could not see the west, he knew there were more soldiers and people there. He walked along the wall to find an open view of the western side of the city. A few women brushed past and nearly knocked him over. Finally he found an open alcove that ended in a curved balustrade of aged gray stone fitted with alternating pillars carved with armored horses rearing high and regal and bowing as if to a king. For a moment, James feared to look over the edge. He couldn’t be sure what he would see, and at the same time he wasn’t entirely sure he wanted to know what it was that everyone was so eager to escape from. But, he bit down and pushed away all the fear and limped until slowly the east side of Arlin City and the great green field beyond came into view. As stunning as it was to see the sun rising from the west, the sight below caused every muscle in his heart to lurch as if he were having a heart attack. His throat seized up; a thick bulb that felt like a smooth golf ball swelled up there preventing him from swallowing. Below he could see lines of soldiers lining up along the walls and below, catapults that had not been there before inside the excavated forms of buildings, archers preparing lengths of flaming arrows, and then…beyond the walls. For several hundred feet there was nothing but green and gold grass. Then, where the Old Oak stood, the same place where James had appeared in the Farthland, stood a black mass a mile wide and half a mile deep, interspersed with long squares of silver. Thousands and thousands of creatures, armed and shuffling impatiently, were there, part of an enormous army. There were men there too, normal men indifferent from those of the Farthland. Near the oak a small circle had been cleared, in which was a tall figure in a bright burnished silver suit of armor, helm removed and flanked by the lyphon, who walked in lonely circles in a motion of obvious discomfort at being held at bay for too long. Three massive wooden horns, now bellowing again in such a deep, resonating tone that he had to close his eyes to make it go away, and a series of tarred catapults made up the rear. His heart sunk deep into his chest and he felt as if it wanted to trade places with his gut. An army, he thought. What have I brought down on these people? He started to cry, but stopped himself as the first tears slipped silently off his chin. Instead, he sucked it back; his muscles spasmed in protest. The army remained still, yet no messenger came forward asking for surrender, and neither did anyone leave Arlin City to suggest the same, or a different end. Luthien’s army simply remained still, anticipating, and antsy. A long, black shadow appeared over his shoulder. He turned and met face to face with a dark brown gryphon in mid-flight, diving straight for him. Two fiery amber eyes centered on his face. It shrieked and raised its claws and, just as suddenly as it had appeared, so too did

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A Discussion of Changes – “Show, Don’t Tell”

Firstly, some notes of changes you might have noticed in the blog itself. 1. Chapter Quick Links: Mr. Bramage, my never failing and unrelentingly supportive fan that tells me how much he loves my work in comments (which I greatly appreciate by the way) had asked me a while back to put back links to previous chapters for quick reference. Well, now I have changed that entirely and put up an actual table in the side bar that will have all the links to all the chapters. Right now I have it set at 20 chapters simply because I haven’t the foggiest of how long this story will be and that seems like a rather modest, if not under-anticipated chapter goal. 2. Novel Progress: A new interesting feature spawned from looking at all those nifty NaNo sites floating about. NaNo offers a little widget you can put on your blog or website that will show your progress in your attempt to write a novel in 30 days. I loved this idea simply because it gives me an interesting marker for people to see where I’m at. So, I put one up. It’s not from NaNo, simply because I can’t use one of theirs since I’m not doing this for that project. However, it will be tracking my progress in this endeavor with an expected goal of 180,000 words, which is quite a lot if you ask me. Whether I will miss that mark or cross it depends entirely on how this story goes. Nevertheless, it’s there for you all to take a gander.3. Copyright Info: It occurred to me that, although my work is technically protected by copyright law, I should put up some sort of copyright just as an added protection. No, I don’t hold a patent or some such, and nobody can on a work of fiction simply because it’s not a commodity that can be traded, however it is a warning to those that might potentially steal from me (for what reasons I will never know simply because it seems silly to steal from an unpublished author). Alright, so now that that is out of the way. I thought I would have a short discussion on that infamous “Show, Don’t Tell” rule, a rule which I am sure I have broken more than a dozen times in the span of these last 37,000 words. This is, and probably always will be, one of those rules that everyone tells you that you have to follow strictly, yet, nobody really ever does. There are hundreds of published authors who ‘tell’ rather than ‘show’. Why have we become so infatuated with this rule then? Because every single major publisher, editor, agent, and author has repeatedly crammed this rule into our heads for reasons I’m not entirely sure of.Now, as a rule, you should follow “Show, Don’t Tell”, since obviously having an entire story of ‘tell’ would be absurd. But there are times when you can get away with it. Take for instance parts of a story where ‘showing’ would simply drag down the pace. Why bother having your character showing you why something is a certain when, when you can tell it in a single sentence.Of course you’ll not want to do this all the time, but if you come to a point where telling would simply make things simpler and keep your pace constant, then just tell. Let’s look at some famous authors who don’t exactly follow the rule.Tolkien: We are mostly all familiar with his work, or should be, not necessarily because he is a fantastic writer (which he isn’t by the way), but because his work was the dawn of an entire era of fantasy writers. His work is littered with telling. He tells you about EVERYTHING in the world of Middle Earth and doesn’t use a lot of time to really show you much of what is going on. Take some of the big battle scenes that were glorified in the movie adaptations. The siege of Isengard is ‘told’ to us after it had already happened, for an example.Diane Duane: I’ve recently become a fan of her work and while she sticks to the “Show, Don’t Tell” rule more than writers like Tolkien, there are parts where she breaks away. Mostly this occurs when she refers to tidbits of information on the characters and things in their lives. Nevertheless, she breaks away from the rule on occasion, and, well, it works. I’ve been blowing through her novels so quickly I’m almost done with them.John Connolly: I just recently read his novel The Book of Lost Things, a book which I recommend anyone to read. It is a thrilling retake on all those ‘other world’ stories involving fairy tales. There are several parts of his book where he has characters ‘tell’ you stories. Because his novel is designed somewhat as a twisted world of pre-existing fairy tales, there are points where certain characters (the Woodsman for example) actually tell you ‘tales’ that are relevant to whatever is going on. These are telling sections, and there is no way around it, however, they work. They draw you in, keep you interested, and altogether keep the pace of the story very smooth.Those are just a few authors, and there’s bound to be hundreds more (Paolini is an example, who is very adept at ‘telling’ us things, and despite what many may say about his work, he has gained critical acclaim).So, should you start telling all the time? Of course not. That would lead to utter garbage, and we all know that it is nearly impossible to sell garbage, although I have to say that there are some novels out there that could be classified as garbage. You should always follow this rule, but you should also realize that breaking it isn’t really that big of a deal, so long as you don’t ‘always’ break it. This isn’t to say that we aren’t prone to making mistakes, something of

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Chapter Nine: On the Brink

(Note:  This is not official version and may be removed in the near future.  This do not reflect what is read in the podcast version, nor any other version you may encounter.  I have preserved the rough form for posterity — or something like that.  This novel has since been rewritten.) James quickly came to realize that he had not entered into the same sort of paralysis he had when Dulien had spoken to him. Even so, voices rose up inside his mind and his vision went from clear as day to dismally blurry. He could see a flurry of figures, moving so fast he started to think that time was either passing him by at an alarming rate, or skipping like a rock on the water. From moment to moment, depending on the pattern of his vision, he could hear voices spoken from the real world, but before he could make out what was being said, the world of chattering entities drew him back into the fray. There were so many voices. He couldn’t focus on any one of them. Some were male, some female, and some even inhuman. Together they formed a loud, animalistic roar, all begging for his attention. He dared not focus, but for reasons he couldn’t be sure. A deep yearning inside his very person wanted to speak and mold with those within his mind, converse with them, but his mind fought against it as if it knew that nothing good would come of it. If he tried, his mind resisted, forbidding him from doing anything it disapproved of. He could only assume that this side of him represented logic, his logic. His vision faded back into the real world again. A scene played out before him, as if from a movie he had once seen. Triska and Pea—as best he could tell from their blurred appearance—spoke over him in sharp whispers. “A lyphon,” Triska said, her voice warbled. “Here? How?” “I don’t know,” Pea said. Then the scene continued, muffled beyond his recognition, until it finally receded as his vision phased out again. His mind felt utterly cluttered, as if he could focus on nothing. He started to sense that he was moving, up and down, up and down, in a swing-like fashion. It was dizzying. Pulses of sound, as if someone were barking orders through water, overcame the voices. He was not grateful, though, as the pulses furthered the nauseating dizziness. His vision returned to the real world, now a different scene. Someone, a woman, crouched over him, her giant eyes hovering inches from his face and her twisted nose nearly touched his lips. He couldn’t feel her, but in his hazy vision could make out the wiry hair that ran along her ears and down her neck, ghostly white. “Virnum,” she said, and then the scene passed away and he found himself back amongst the voices, the throbbing, and the pulsing. A flash of light filled the foggy world, and, to his delight, he found himself slipping from the state of paralysis and into a deep, rejuvenating, and altogether amazing sleep. When James broke away from the nothingness of his dreams he was overcome with pain unlike any he had ever felt before. Searing, agonizing, and unrelenting pain that made it altogether impossible to determine the origin. His head hurt. His body hurt. Even his jaw muscles hurt, preventing him from groaning or making any unnecessary motion that might trigger further pain—though he couldn’t fathom any pain more excruciating. While his eyes were in working order, he was unable to truly make out his surroundings. The room seemed…different. He couldn’t quite explain it, partly because the pain prevented him from focusing fully on any one thing at a time. Eventually he managed a tiny cry. Inside he cheered at the monumental feat. The wiry-haired woman from before appeared, poking her head into his field of vision like a giant bird. She eyed him; he tried to look back. Then in a tiny, whispery voice she said, “Virnum,” and the pain subside enough so he could bear it. He finally managed to see the features of her face. She had a long, thin face that forced her mouth to look as if it were constantly wording an ‘o’. Her skin was darker than his, but he couldn’t tell if it was because of her race or from exposure to the sun. For clothes she wore a pair of tattered robes over a supertunic that failed to hide her worn and beaten body from years of age and hard use. The robes were burned at the edges of the sleeves. She has lived a long, hard life, he thought. The woman walked away to a nearby table where she poised herself over a stone jigsaw puzzle. James felt ignored, but thankful nonetheless that he could now manage to move with only minor discomfort. The pain had gone from unbearable to livable. He hoped it would go away completely. Sitting up, he took in his surroundings. He was no longer in the dining floor of the keep within the Lord’s Hold. Rather he had been taken during his slumber to a small, yet cozy little room with one window next to a shining iron door opposite where the wiry-haired woman mused over her puzzle. He shook his head to find that the darkness still prevailed outside. The room itself was lit by several enormous candles twice as large as his arm, irregular numbers of wicks stuck into them—nine, four, seven, twelve, and more. The stone walls were covered in framed paintings of armor clad soldiers, noblemen, and gryphons. Among the furniture were two round tables, a pair of gold-lace covered rocking chairs that looked comfortable enough to make even the most raggedy old person feel at home, and two straw beds—one of which he lay in, covered in three layers of quilted blankets. Other than the wiry-haired woman, he was alone. “Where am I?”

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